planning+access+for+information+Max+Chung

==According to a research held in 2000, human beings produced over 1 exabyte (1 billion gigabytes or 10^8 bytes) annually and in fact, the amount of information we acquired each year exponentially multiplied ever since. These information have been studied and provided us with even more benefits than losses and gave us the world that our ancestors have ever dreamed of.== ||
 * **Topic sentence** || ==Limitation to open information should cross a line to a certain extent.== ||
 * **Elaborate** || ==Followed by the advancement of internet communication, plethora of confidential and affronting information are publicized to the population of billions without knowing the rights of the victims to retain their information covert, resulting revulsion, violence, deception, and even security intimidation to the victims. However, contemporary world demands and requires as much information as possible for the utilization of modern development.== ||
 * **Examples/Evidence** || ==Couple months back, one of the most immense database PlayStation Network was hacked by an organization called the "Anonymous" and rumor states that the organization may have embezzled all the 2.2 million credit card numbers of the users stored within the database as well. On the contrary, mass open information are the sources that gave us the shift from the Dark Ages to the current status of our prosperous lives in which we believe in human's potential to make the impossibles possible.== ||
 * **Explanation/Analysis** || ==There have been several reports of fraudulent charges on the users' credit card that ratifies the rumor. If the rumor actually turned out to be the truth, the next step the hackers might take is to sell the database to a different organization for their own profit, but others catastrophe.==
 * **Link sentence** || ==As a quote states, "too much of anything is bad," certain information should only be accessed within the unfixed boundary which we are still trying to solidify.== ||

Final Draft

Limitation to open information should cross a line to a certain extent. Followed by the advancement of Internet communication, overabundance of confidential and affronting information have been publicized to billions of population. The public is unaware of the rights of the victims to keep their information concealed, consequently resulting in revulsion, violence, deception, and even security intimidation to those victimized individuals. However, the contemporary world demands and requires as much information as possible for the maintainance of modern development. A few months ago, one of the most immense database, PlayStation Network, was hacked by an organization called the "Anonymous" and there are rumors stating the organization may have embezzled all of the 2.2 million credit card numbers of the users stored within the database. There have been several reports of fraudulent charges on the users' credit cards that ratify the speculation. If the rumor actually turns out to be true, the next step the hackers might take is to sell the database to a different organization for their own profit while dragging others into a catastrophe. On the contrary, mass open information are the sources that gave us the shift from the Dark Ages to the current status of our prosperous lives in which we believe in the humans’ potentials to make the impossibles possible. According to a research held in 2000, human beings produced over 1 exabytes (1 billion gigabytes or 10^8 bytes) annually and in fact, the amount of information we acquired each year exponentially multiplied ever since. These information have been studied and have provided us with much more benefits than losses. Furthermore, they gave us the world that our ancestors have ever dreamed of. As a quote states, "too much of anything is bad," certain information should only be accessed within an unfixed boundary which we are still trying to define.

Edited Rough Draft (Esther)

Limitation to open information should cross a line to a certain extent. Followed by the advancement of internet communication, plethora of confidential and affronting information is publicized to billions of population. As the public is unaware of the rights of the victims to retain their information covert, revulsion, violence, deception, and even security intimidation to those victims follow as results. However, contemporary world demands and requires as much information as possible for the utilization of modern development. A few months ago, one of the most immense database, PlayStation Network, was hacked by an organization called the "Anonymous" and there are rumors stating the organization may have embezzled all of the 2.2 million credit card numbers of the users stored within the database. There have been several reports of fraudulent charges on the users' credit cards that ratify the speculation. If the rumor actually turns out to be true, the next step the hackers might take is to sell the database to a different organization for their own profit while causing others to be in a catastrophe. On the contrary, mass open information is the source that gave us the shift from the Dark Ages to the current status of our prosperous lives in which we believe in the humans’ potentials to make the impossibles possible. According to a research held in 2000, human beings produced over 1 exabytes (1 billion gigabytes or 10^8 bytes) annually and in fact, the amount of information we acquired each year exponentially multiplied ever since. These information have been studied and have provided us with even more benefits than losses. Furthermore, they gave us the world that our ancestors have ever dreamed of. As a quote states, "too much of anything is bad," certain information should only be accessed within an unfixed boundary which we are still trying to solidify.