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 * **Topic Sentence** || **The Muslim empires of the 14th-16th centuries never came to dominate as Europe will because of the leaders greed and desire.** ||
 * **Elaboration** || **The Muslim empires had sufficiently great impacts on the world. However, the leaders misjudgment led the empire to fall and end up having other empires to rise.** ||
 * **Examples/Evidence** || # **The sultan kept his sons prisoner in the harem**
 * -cut them off from education**
 * -cut them off from contact with the world**
 * 2. Lack of Resource** ||
 * **Explanation/analysis** || **Due to the reason that the leaders got scared of their sons taking over their power, they kept their sons out of the education and communication with others. This process continued, producing an ignorant sultans who eventually brought down the great Ottoman Empire. Also, Aurangzeb’s reign fell down slowly by lacking sources. The empire was a disaster. The nobles had a luxurious life, caring only to indulge themselves. These factors led the central state weakened and divide into several states.** ||
 * **Link Sentence** || **During 14th-16th centuries, the Muslim empires did not dominate the world even some of the emperors, like Shah Abbas, made a great achievements. The main reason will be because of the leaders’ miscalculation.** ||


 * ** Topic sentence ** || ** There should be a limit to access to information. ** ||
 * ** Elaboration ** || ** Having the access to information will help to develop the technology, such as medication and weapons. However, people have the rights to keep their information on their own privately. ** ||
 * ** Examples/Evidence ** || ** 1) Spreading one's medical form to public may lead to harsh consequence. **
 * 2) Ability to hack ID number from other countries. ** ||
 * ** Explanation/Analysis ** || ** All of the people have at least one thing to keep it by their own. Showing one's medic **** al form to public will make that person feel offended and ashamed that everyone knows one's secret. If one was a child, there is a possibility that they get hurt easily and suicide. **
 * Recently, Chinese hacked Koreans' ID number and their private information. Chinese started touse Koreans' ID number to access to certain website for negative use. ** ||
 * ** Link sentence ** || ** To keep one's privacy, there should be a limit when people access to information. ** ||