planning+for+the+essay


 * == Topic Sentence == || == There should be some limits accessing to information. == ||
 * == Elaboration == || == Information that is related to privacy, security, personal information should be limited to some extent. However, if we do not have any ways to access information, the society will lose ways to express themselves. == ||
 * == Examples/Evidence == || == Sources in the military is important for security and personal information could be used for crime. There could be security problems and involve situations with the countries. For example, my personal information got hacked in the internet and I noticed that the hacker could use my information in many various kinds of ways to use in different crimes.== ||
 * == Explanation/analysis == || == These crimes could affect the citizens and the country. However, if we get limited to all the information that are needed, then there should be problems too. The society will lose ways to express themselves and have affect on living too.== ||
 * == Link Sentence == || == There could be problems letting the citizens to access to all kinds of information however, there could be problems by limiting to much information so the government should limit some information that is not needed for citizens to access to. == ||

= The three Muslim Empires of the 1300-1700 time period each made significant contributions to their worlds and the rest of world history. Why did the Muslim world not come to dominate world affairs during this time period? =
 * == Topic Sentence == || ==== This is the main idea that you want to make about the topic. It should state in one sentence what your paragraph is going to be about. **E.g. While the Muslim empires of the 14th-16th centuries had significant impacts on the world, they never came to dominate as Europe will because... (remember "rule of 3")** ====
 * == Topic Sentence == || ==== This is the main idea that you want to make about the topic. It should state in one sentence what your paragraph is going to be about. **E.g. While the Muslim empires of the 14th-16th centuries had significant impacts on the world, they never came to dominate as Europe will because... (remember "rule of 3")** ====

The Muslim empire many powerful contributions to the world, however, they did not effect the world affairs because they had poor leadership skills. ||
 * == Elaboration == || == Write one or two sentences explaining your topic sentence. **E.g. location? time period?** ==

Muslim had poor leadership skills during 1300 ~ 1700. The empire began to fall apart because of the leaders.
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 * == Examples/Evidence == || ==== Explain **specific evidence/examples** for your 3 choices in your topic sentence. ====

The emperors killed their talented sons; he thought they would take the power away from him and seize the power. For example, Shah Abbas killed his sons however, the grandsons like him chased after him and he got killed. The empire fell down because they did not took their responsibility as a emperor. ||
 * == Explanation/analysis == || ==== This is a crucial part of the paragraph which requires some thought. Here, you need to explain how the evidence/examples you provided support your main idea in the topic sentence. **WHY** did you choose these reasons over others? __Give specific reasons AND how they explain the failure of the Muslim empires to achieve world dominance at that time.__. **E.g. Clearly the administrative methods used by some of the leaders of the Muslim Empires hurt their ability to rise to world dominance because...**This should be about 4 sentences in length.====

The method that was used by Shah Abbas was not a good choice to make. It made them fail to effect the world affairs. He killed their sons in order to maintain power for themselves however, he ruled the empire quite fairly. Killing his sons made empire to fall apart because of their temptation to achieve power. Another emperor, Aurangzeb, destroyed the temples which angered the people which led the empire to fall apart. ||
 * == Link Sentence == || ==== This sentence summarizes your paragraph and links back to the main idea in the topic sentence. When writing an essay, the role of the this sentence is to link paragraph back to your thesis. ====

The Muslim empires were powerful but it did not come to dominate world affairs during this time period because of their poor leadership skills. ||